Thanks for your feedback. Let me try to follow up on your comments.

The story was not meant as a history of computers, but about the historical conditions which gave rise to computers. Thus, my mention of Charles Babbage has nothing to do with his influence or lack of influence on modern computers. Instead I mentioned him as an example of the fact that already in the 1800s a need for computers had evolved. After all the British government was willing to pay him a considerable sum to develop such a machine.

A bit of my motivation for talking about his is that when I begin explaining that assembly programming is just about moving numbers around and performing calculations on them, that would seem very lame to a beginner. Like where is the computer graphics, the web browser and the word processor?

I think it is useful to clarify that early computers were nothing like that, but that there was strong and very much real need for computers in society. It simply wasn't the kinds of stuff home users are used to using computers for.